Dear Sir or Madam
I'm writing this letter to thank you for offering me great service in my trip.
I'm very satisfied with my trip in the North Sea in last week. I'm sure my chance to enjoy such a comfortable and exciting holiday should be thanks to your effort. The beach is so beautiful and great, especially with bright sunshine and seawater, and more satisfyingly, the homelike room and topping dining room are both beyond my expectation. I will remember the perfect experience forever.
Many thanks to you for all the things you done for me. Wish you a bright future.
Yours
Li Ming
| 改动句子 | 改动说明 |
|---|---|
| for offering | 因为...，引出感谢的原因，由于for是介词，因此后面加doing形式 |
| satisfied with | be satisfied with表示对...满意 |
| my chance | my chance 作后面句子的主语 |
| satisfyingly | satisfying表示令人满意的，修饰事物，satisfied修饰人，表示感到满意的，并且此处需要用副词 |
| are both beyond my expectation | beyond是介词，不能用来作谓语，前面需要加上are，另外“期望”用expectation好一些 |
| I will remember the perfect experience forever | remember是及物动词，后面必须加宾语 |
| Many thanks to you for all the things you done for me | 原文中“请接受我的感谢”意思好别扭，还是重新感谢一次吧 |