Dear Sir or Madam,
I'm writing this letter to express I want to be a volunteer to serve the earthquake-striken area.
I wish to become a person of positive energy to be able to help others. Certainly, it's attractive for me to work as a volunteer. It is my dream to help victims who were injured and lost their home and family members in the earthquake. Hence, when I saw your enlist notice, I knew it was what I was looking for. In brief, I am an unclouded girl who is adept at communicating with depressed people to help them rebuild their faith. I am sure that this skill is necessary to help quake survivors, especially orphan children to regain their hope of life.
Hopefully, you can offer me a chance to realize my wish.
Cordially yours
Li Ming
| 改动句子 | 改动说明 |
|---|---|
| Dear Sir or Madam | 应该用or而不是and |
| attractive | attraction是名词，此处应该用形容词 |
| for me to work | it ... for sb to do sth，形式主语的正确用法 |
| victims who were | 此处应该用复数，对应的was要改成were |
| an | unclouded以元音字母开头，前面应该用an |
| adept at communicating | adept at doing sth，擅长做某事 |
| rebuild | help sb do sth，帮助某人做某事，用动词原形 |
| survivors | 拼写错误 |
| regain | 拼写错误 |