I am a student in our university. I am writing this letter to make some suggestions about concerning physical condition of the students.
I have noticed that many of my classmates have become remarkably weak. They prefer playing computer in the dormitory every day than going to the playground to do exercise. Therefore, I wonder whether the university can do anything to recover their health. I believe it would be useful to make a strict rule that the students can graduate only if they pass sports test(P.E.). Additionally, we will fall in love with sports if we have swimming pools, and so on.
I'm sure that the physical condition of students can be largely improved with these measures.
Yours truly
Li Ming
| 改动句子 | 改动说明 |
|---|---|
| our | 题目中说收信人是你的校长，那这儿应该用our university好一些 |
| make some suggestions about | 题目中说是让提建议，并不是“帮助”(help) |
| classmates | 这里应该用复数 |
| become | become的过去分词仍旧是become |
| palying | prefer doing sth |
| going | prefer doing sth rather than doing，固定句式 |
| do exercise | 运动：do/take exercise |
| whether | weather是“天气”的意思，“是否”为whether |
| anything | 前面有whether因此这是一个疑问句，疑问句和否定句中要将something换成anything |
| to | to recover动词不定式表目的 |
| only | 加个only意思更加明确 |
| these | 拼写错误 |
| measures | 措施 |
| 结尾 | 没有落款 |