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 # 🚥 Towards Zero Traffic Deaths
 
-When I moved from Rio de Janeiro to São Paulo, one of the biggest improvements
-on my quality of life was becoming car-free. I still used a car here and there,
-to visit in-laws or traveling to the country, but swapping out driving and
-maintaining a car to a mix of subway and cycling day-to-day was game changing.
-That's not the norm in São Paulo, but it was a privilege I obtained that became
-a key factor in enjoying the city.
-
-Fast forward a few years; the new urbanist movement around 15-minute cities
-growing stronger; climate crisis ever looming and active transportation policy
-becoming more widely sought-after; I move to Vancouver. If my overall experience
-as city dweller improved in almost every axis after moving to São Paulo except
-perhaps for "beach time", the same gains repeat tenfold here plus getting
-beaches back - on summers at least.
-
-Like any big city, Vancouver is a complex amalgamation of forward and backward
-policies, culture and infrastructure. On the one hand, I'm as confident as ever
-that I can live a complete urban life without owning a car due to the decent
-amount of cycling infrastructure around [MetroCore][], plus the amount of
+In 2017, I moved from my beloved birthplace, Rio de Janeiro, to advance my
+career in the powerhouse that is São Paulo. One of the biggest improvements in
+my quality of life came from going car-free. While I occasionally used a car to
+visit in-laws or travel to the countryside, swapping the stress of driving and
+the costs of maintaining a car for a mix of subway and bike-share cycling was a
+game changer. This isn't the norm in São Paulo, but it was a newfound privilege
+that became a key factor in my enjoyment of the city.
+
+Fast-forward a few years to 2023: the urbanist movement around 15-minute cities
+was growing stronger, the climate crisis was accelerating, active transportation
+policies and experiments were becoming popular, and I was moving to Vancouver.
+If my overall experience as city dweller improved in almost every way after
+moving to São Paulo (except perhaps in the "beach time" axis), these gains
+repeated tenfold in the "Greenest City". Plus, I got beaches back! Well, with
+caveats, but I digress.
+
+On one hand, I became more confident than ever that I can live a complete urban
+life without owning a car due to the decent amount of cycling infrastructure in
+and near Downtown Vancouver, a transit system punching way above its weight for
+the metro region size and population (by NA/LATAM standards), and the amount of
 public-transit-accessible adventures - from turquoise lake hikes to snowboarding
-mountaintops. On the other hand, progress is sometimes slow, sometimes
-non-existent, as waves of car-centrism ebb and flow more or less in synchrony
-with conservatism majorities on the wheels of the public sphere.
+mountaintops.
+
+On the other hand, progress is sometimes slow, sometimes non-existent, as waves
+of car-centrism ebb and flow more or less in synchrony with conservatism
+majorities on the wheels of the public sphere.
 
-[MetroCore]: https://thedva.ca/defining-vancouvers-metrocore/
 
 Rio, São Paulo, and Vancouver can and should and do more to make car dependency
 a thing of the past, so becoming car-free becomes not a privilege of the few,