[MIRROR] Rephrases advisory level descriptions (#2847)

* Rephrases advisory level descriptions (#82585)

## About The Pull Request

Some of the station alert descriptions contained grammatical errors.
This PR corrects some word choice, punctuation, and grammar mistakes as
well as editing some sections for clarity. For example, Pulsar Star's
current warning

> "Your sector's advisory level is Pulsar Star. A large unknown
electromagnetic field has stormed through nearby surveillance equipment.
No surveillance data has been able to be obtained showing no credible
threats to Nanotrasen assets within the Spinward Sector. The Department
advises maintaining high alert against potential threats, regardless of
a lack of information."

has been changed to 
     

> "Your sector's advisory level is Pulsar Star. A large, unknown
electromagnetic field has stormed through nearby surveillance equipment
causing major data loss. Partial data was recovered and showed no
credible threats to Nanotrasen assets within the Spinward Sector;
however, the Department of Intelligence advises maintaining high alert
against potential threats due to the lack of complete data."

## Why It's Good For The Game

Readability is important

## Changelog
:cl:
spellcheck: grammar fixes in the roundstart advisory warnings
/:cl:

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* Rephrases advisory level descriptions

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Co-authored-by: NovaBot <[email protected]>
Co-authored-by: Horatio22 <[email protected]>
Co-authored-by: MrMelbert <[email protected]>

code/controllers/subsystem/dynamic/dynamic.dm

@@ -377,40 +377,40 @@ SUBSYSTEM_DEF(dynamic)
 	if (prob(PULSAR_REPORT_CHANCE))
 		if(HAS_TRAIT(SSstation, STATION_TRAIT_BANANIUM_SHIPMENTS))
 			advisory_string += "Advisory Level: <b>Clown Planet</b></center><BR>"
-			advisory_string += "Your sector's advisory level is Clown Planet! Our bike horns have picked up on a large bananium stash. Clowns show a large influx of clowns on your station. We highly advice you to slip any threats to keep Honkotrasen assets within the Banana Sector. The Department advises defending chemistry from any clowns that are trying to make baldium or space lube."
+			advisory_string += "Your sector's advisory level is Clown Planet! Our bike horns have picked up on a large bananium stash. Clowns show a large influx of clowns on your station. We highly advise you to slip any threats to keep Honkotrasen assets within the Banana Sector. The Department of Intelligence advises defending chemistry from any clowns that are trying to make baldium or space lube."
 			return advisory_string
 
 		advisory_string += "Advisory Level: <b>Pulsar Star</b></center><BR>"
-		advisory_string += "Your sector's advisory level is Pulsar Star. A large unknown electromagnetic field has stormed through nearby surveillance equipment. No surveillance data has been able to be obtained showing no credible threats to Nanotrasen assets within the Spinward Sector. The Department advises maintaining high alert against potential threats, regardless of a lack of information."
+		advisory_string += "Your sector's advisory level is Pulsar Star. A large, unknown electromagnetic field has stormed through nearby surveillance equipment, causing major data loss. Partial data was recovered and showed no credible threats to Nanotrasen assets within the Spinward Sector; however, the Department of Intelligence advises maintaining high alert against potential threats due to the lack of complete data."
 		return advisory_string
 
 	switch(round(shown_threat))
 		if(0)
 			advisory_string += "Advisory Level: <b>White Dwarf</b></center><BR>"
-			advisory_string += "Your sector's advisory level is White Dwarf. Our surveillors have ruled out any and all potential risks known in our database, ruling out the loss of our assets in the Spinward Sector. We advise a lower level of security, alongside distributing ressources on potential profit."
+			advisory_string += "Your sector's advisory level is White Dwarf. Our surveillance has ruled out any and all potential threats known in our database, eliminating most risks to our assets in the Spinward Sector. We advise a lower level of security, alongside distributing resources on potential profit."
 		if(1 to 19)
 			var/show_core_territory = (GLOB.current_living_antags.len > 0)
 			if (prob(FAKE_GREENSHIFT_FORM_CHANCE))
 				show_core_territory = !show_core_territory
 
 			if (show_core_territory)
 				advisory_string += "Advisory Level: <b>Blue Star</b></center><BR>"
-				advisory_string += "Your sector's advisory level is Blue Star. At this threat advisory, the risk of attacks on Nanotrasen assets within the sector is minor, but cannot be ruled out entirely. Remain vigilant."
+				advisory_string += "Your sector's advisory level is Blue Star. At this threat advisory, the risk of attacks on Nanotrasen assets within the sector is minor but cannot be ruled out entirely. Remain vigilant."
 			else
 				advisory_string += "Advisory Level: <b>Green Star</b></center><BR>"
-				advisory_string += "Your sector's advisory level is Green Star. Surveillance information shows no credible threats to Nanotrasen assets within the Spinward Sector at this time. As always, the Department advises maintaining vigilance against potential threats, regardless of a lack of known threats."
+				advisory_string += "Your sector's advisory level is Green Star. Surveillance information shows no credible threats to Nanotrasen assets within the Spinward Sector at this time. As always, the Department of Intelligence advises maintaining vigilance against potential threats, regardless of a lack of known threats."
 		if(20 to 39)
 			advisory_string += "Advisory Level: <b>Yellow Star</b></center><BR>"
-			advisory_string += "Your sector's advisory level is Yellow Star. Surveillance shows a credible risk of enemy attack against our assets in the Spinward Sector. We advise a heightened level of security, alongside maintaining vigilance against potential threats."
+			advisory_string += "Your sector's advisory level is Yellow Star. Surveillance shows a credible risk of enemy attack against our assets in the Spinward Sector. We advise a heightened level of security alongside maintaining vigilance against potential threats."
 		if(40 to 65)
 			advisory_string += "Advisory Level: <b>Orange Star</b></center><BR>"
-			advisory_string += "Your sector's advisory level is Orange Star. Upon reviewing your sector's intelligence, the Department has determined that the risk of enemy activity is moderate to severe. At this advisory, we recommend maintaining a higher degree of security and alertness, and vigilance against threats that may (or will) arise."
+			advisory_string += "Your sector's advisory level is Orange Star. Upon reviewing your sector's intelligence, the Department has determined that the risk of enemy activity is moderate to severe. At this advisory, we recommend maintaining a higher degree of security and reviewing red alert protocols with command and the crew."
 		if(66 to 79)
 			advisory_string += "Advisory Level: <b>Red Star</b></center><BR>"
 			advisory_string += "Your sector's advisory level is Red Star. The Department of Intelligence has decrypted Cybersun communications suggesting a high likelihood of attacks on Nanotrasen assets within the Spinward Sector. Stations in the region are advised to remain highly vigilant for signs of enemy activity and to be on high alert."
 		if(80 to 99)
 			advisory_string += "Advisory Level: <b>Black Orbit</b></center><BR>"
-			advisory_string += "Your sector's advisory level is Black Orbit. Your sector's local comms network is currently undergoing a blackout, and we are therefore unable to accurately judge enemy movements within the region. However, information passed to us by GDI suggests a high amount of enemy activity in the sector, indicative of an impending attack. Remain on high alert, and as always, we advise remaining vigilant against any other potential threats."
+			advisory_string += "Your sector's advisory level is Black Orbit. Your sector's local communications network is currently undergoing a blackout, and we are therefore unable to accurately judge enemy movements within the region. However, information passed to us by GDI suggests a high amount of enemy activity in the sector, indicative of an impending attack. Remain on high alert and vigilant against any other potential threats."
 		if(100)
 			advisory_string += "Advisory Level: <b>Midnight Sun</b></center><BR>"
 			advisory_string += "Your sector's advisory level is Midnight Sun. Credible information passed to us by GDI suggests that the Syndicate is preparing to mount a major concerted offensive on Nanotrasen assets in the Spinward Sector to cripple our foothold there. All stations should remain on high alert and prepared to defend themselves."