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 ## Applying for Ph.D.
 
 I'm looking for PhD opportunities in top US schools to continue my research.
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 Moreover, I would appreciate if you recommend this tutorial to your collaborators.
 
-## About the tutorial
+## About the tutorial and research
 
-A good CG research work has novelty, while a seminal work also helps other researchers/engineers/artists pursue novelty.
-I wish to accelerate this process with this tutorial for my upcoming PhD application.
+A good CG research work has novelty, while a seminal work also helps other researchers, engineers, and artists pursue novelty.
+I wish to accelerate this process with this tutorial for my upcoming Ph.D. application.
 Meanwhile, it's a practice of my mentor, [Li-yi Wei][Liyi bio], a Jedi master's
 views on [being a good educator](https://blog.liyiwei.org/?p=4668) and [source code along with papers](https://blog.liyiwei.org/?p=868).
 
+Blender Grease Pencil (GP) greatly inspired my research.
+It wouldn't be possible without those generous helps in learning the code from members of GP,
+especially [Falk David](https://www.linkedin.com/in/falk-david-61654b203/?originalSubdomain=nl) and [Clément Foucault](http://www.clement-foucault.com/).
+
 ## SoP
 
 #### Overview
 
+I am applying for a Ph.D. program in Computer Science (CS) to continue my study of digital painting.
 As my first-author paper, _Ciallo: The Next-Generation Vector Paint Program_ suggests,
-I'm interested in Computer Graphics (CG), particularly in developing digital paint software like Adobe Photoshop and Illustration.
-I am applying for a Ph.D. program in Computer Science (CS) to continue my study on digital painting.
+I'm interested in Computer Graphics (CG), particularly developing digital paint software like Adobe Photoshop and Illustration.
 
-My research has already made breakthrough in this topic. I wish to make further progress during my PhD career and attract more researchers work on it.
-To achieve that, now I'm developing a tutorial website (yeah the one you are looking at) to teach the brush rendering from my research
-and transferring it into [Blender][GP dev].
+My research has already made a critical breakthrough in this topic.
+I wish to progress further during my Ph.D. career and attract more researchers to work on it.
+To achieve that, I'm developing a tutorial website (yeah, the one you are looking at) to teach the brush rendering from my research
+and integrating it into [Blender][GP dev].
 
-#### What I prepared in details
+#### What I prepared in detail
 
-In the project [Ciallo], I designed the algorithms and developed the program individually.
-And I wrote and published the research paper under the supervision of [Li-Yi Wei][Liyi bio].
-The features I developed have been anticipated by the CG researchers/engineers/artists for almost two decades,
-which is the reason why our paper reviewers are ok with a bit of exaggeration ("the next-generation") in the title.
-Now I'm developing the website to teach everyone interested in my research and
-integrating the upgraded version of my research into the Blender Grease Pencil (GP).
+In the project [Ciallo], I designed the algorithms and developed the program individually,
+and later wrote and published the research paper under the supervision of [Li-Yi Wei][Liyi bio].
+The features I developed, GPU brush rendering and vector fill, have been anticipated by CG researchers, engineers, and artists for almost two decades,
+That's why our paper reviewers are okay with a bit of exaggeration ("the next-generation") in the title.
+I'm now integrating my research into Blender Grease Pencil (GP), which greatly inspired my research .
 
-Before I started working on the Ciallo, my initial goal was to fix several GP's rendering bugs in 2021,
-but they turned out far more than simple bugs but the algorithms causing the bugs were under-researched.
-It was reckless for me, a naive young man with zero CS research experience, to try solving them, but the results cannot be better.
-I guess the courage comes from where I started to learn the CG: doing something truly helpful for digital painting.
+Before I started working on the Ciallo, my initial goal was to fix several GP's rendering bugs.
+They turned out far more than simple bugs, but the algorithms causing the bugs were under-researched.
+It was reckless for me, a naive young man with zero CS research experience, to try solving them, but the results could not be better.
+The courage comes from where I started to learn CG: doing something truly beneficial for digital painting.
 
 #### Why digital painting
 
-I've been using graphics design software for digital painting like Photoshop since high school.
-Meanwhile, I love playing video games and watching Japanese animation (anime), both of which rely on graphics design.
-But unluckily, nobody directed me to the road of CG for my own interest in high school.
-I majored in Psychology at college and learned statistics and [AI](https://coursera.org/share/92365937af6386c044ca4752e80e25df) to follow the trend.
+I've been using graphics design software for digital painting since high school.
+Meanwhile, I love playing video games and watching Japanese animation (anime), both of which rely on graphics design software.
+However, with limited career guidance, I should have asked for more help finding the path I love and excel in high school.
+Randomly, I majored in Psychology at college, where I did a poor job.
 
-But I determined my mind to pursue my true passions, game and anime, as a career after graduation.
-At the time, there are infinite possible ways to contribute the game or anime industry for me.
-I chose to research on digital painting, which I had already been familiar with and passionate on.
-Also, a great research in digital painting can truly influence the industries and help artists produce more enjoyable artworks.
+Luckily, I never gave up finding and was determined to pursue my true passions, game and anime, as a career after graduation.
+At the time, there were infinite possible ways to contribute to the game or anime industry.
+I chose to research digital painting, which I was already familiar with and passionate about.
+Also, significant research in digital painting can truly benefit artists producing great artworks and influence the industries.
 
-#### Career Plan
 
-Therefore, my career goal is to keep contributing to the industries, starting from where I have made breakthrough.
-There are a lot of easy-to-achieve but influential works waiting for our CG community to explore and discover.
-Obviously, I cover tackle all the relevant works individually.
-That's why during my academic career, I want to guide and inspire more researchers and engineers to work on them.
-I'm eager to connect with individuals who share these interests.
 
+#### Career Plan
+
+Therefore, my career goal is to be a researcher and educator and keep contributing to the industries.
+Many low-hanging fruits are waiting for our CG community to explore and discover, starting from where I have made the breakthrough.
+I can only handle some of the relevant work individually.
+That's why I want to guide and inspire more researchers and engineers to work on them during my academic career.
+To begin with, I've created this tutorial series to help everybody learn my research.
+I'm looking forward to assisting my collaborators working on the same research topic in the future.
 
 [GP dev]: https://devtalk.blender.org/t/add-stamp-brush-and-fix-airbrush/30884/3
 [Liyi bio]: https://www.liyiwei.org/personal/bio.html